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HEARTBREAK TASTES JUST LIKE STEEL

How do you feel? I designed myself to love you more, I scratch your skin, Iím waiting outside to tell you youíre lovely.
I crawl to your house and I nail myself to your door with my arms outspread, so you can see that I love you more.
I slit my wrists with porcelain and I tear my throat to shreds so you would notice me, finally, finally.
I swallow my promise to never taste this again, Iím laughing as I bleed to death, as I bleed to death, as I bleed to death

Hold out. Itís such a waste to say that you need me more, when you really donít at all.
Itís the iron taste of blood in my mouth from biting my tongue for way too long.

Smiling as I raise my head and softly ask how was your day and Iíll sleep on the couch at night, Iíll even stay out of your way, Iíll keep you safe when you are not, Iíll keep you warm when you are cold, Iíll wake you up at 2 am just to tell you that I care.
I find solace in the curves of your hips, I think youíre beautiful even though you donít need me, even though you donít need me at all, even though you donít, even though you donít need me at all.

Thinking back at what has been, love struck, snow blind, it seemed all right at the time, Iíve got blackened eyes from crying all night for you.
Question the reasons behind my convictions, Iím killing myself even though I know what not to do, its just too much trouble you know.
Heartbreak tastes just like steel. Heartbreak tastes just like steel. Heartbreak tastes just like steel.  
Marry me! Under the stars with a broken needle as my ring to you and a cat carved inside your arm as your ring to me

Hold out. Itís such a waste to say that you need me more, when you really donít at all.
Itís the iron taste of blood in my mouth from biting my tongue for way too long.

Smiling as I raise my head and softly ask how was your day and Iíll sleep on the couch at night, Iíll even stay out of your way, Iíll keep you safe when you are not, Iíll keep you warm when you are cold, Iíll wake you up at 2 am just to tell you that I care.
I find solace in the curves of your hips, I think youíre beautiful even though you donít need me, even though you donít need me at all, even though you donít, even though you donít need me at all.
heartbreak tastes just like steel. i wrote this about 5 months ago. the Awesome band, Jeffrey Starlight, is performing the song.
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XxAirtvxX Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2011
I love it so much
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darkroseprincess Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2010
a taste of steel, a taste of blood - that is what love is.
so true...
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mistynight49 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes.
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bakaikarus Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2010
i actually really really like this. so intense. so true.
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RikkiluvsGaara1 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
This piece is the best piece of work i have read in a loong time!I just...i love the words you used to explain such feelings of affection and pain. This is...its simply amazing. May i use this as part of my ID on here if i credit you?I would loovee that so much(:
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Evilangel642 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing! So well written!
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Miz-Undastod Featured By Owner May 13, 2009
tbh i wuld saii it taste more like a burning flame Lolz
but still great poem !!
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memorabilia-art Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2009
absolutely lovely!
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ADPx1993 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2009
this is amazing
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Tsukamei Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2008
beautiful . . .
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latenightphotosxx Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2007
It really does taste like steel.
you are completely right.
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cityofstars Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2007
thank you
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SomnolentImages Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2007  Professional Photographer
Amazing! Song writing is so hard.. and this is very well written! :clap:
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BombaysChylde Featured By Owner May 24, 2007
Awesome piece.
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zahd Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2007
this is an awesome piece.
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twistedblueyes Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2006
great i love the line " I think youíre beautiful even though you donít need me, even though you donít need me at all, even though you donít, even though you donít need me at all."
coz i can just hear it in my head
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b-e-c-k-y Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2006
powerful. wow i miss reading well planned out words. very poetic and so true in almost anyone that has gone through deep love that is so strong, it's painful. i love your words and congrats on having a band sing it. you're very talented, keep it up

becky
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Elif-Swuad Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2006
Hearbreak tastes just like steel, I know just how it can feel. I would have broken another bottle to see Starlight sing its song, but not now I quit carving verses on my arm. I happened to put up something small, finally, as I happened to come up on this call. I know its spinining somewhere still though I've almost succeeded in keeping still, please look into my deviation and tell me what you thought.
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phoenixmemory Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
great use of repetition. perfect for a song
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cityofstars Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2006
thanks!
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